Mr. Buck,
Fantastic short story. Intriguing and well thought out. I enjoyed the extra little details, such as the incident with the things sent by his father and the trip to the ER.
Overall impression: an entertaining and curious tale that roped me in but was a little unclear about whether 'The Sound' was actually the dishwasher or whether that was something he was thinking.
Emotional response: I did occasionally chuckle, which is always a quality worth going for in your readers.
Story Composure: Very well done- I felt like certain bits of the story didn't drag on any longer than other bits, it was very well rounded.
Characters: Your main character was really well developed in that way that makes it seem like you're not trying to develop him and instead recount an actual story, which was a great effect for the content. Tiptoeing around direct characterization and in doing so letting the readers identify his character traits was a very well done aspect of your story.
Great read, thanks for the entertainment!
-Waldecam
Great feeling conveyed, short but just long enough to really sell the idea, and a very intriguing one at that! I would consider rephrasing "and without reflection barely existed" because I had to go back and reread to make sure I was seeing it correctly, which I was, but it still didn't make complete sense. I'm slightly on the fence about the use of the word "noir" in the first sentence. Being a French student, I understand its meaning but almost feel like it is so out of the ordinary that it would fit better in italics, perhaps. Anyhow, a great piece of writing. Very inspiring and sweeping.
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