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Rated: E | (4.5)
I gave you this rating because it is a good story.

I stumbled on 'Wake up'- 'secreted' - 'ate that there'

And some minor punctuation.

Seems a little critical, I know, but with a few small changes, this peice could certainly be read in the likes of 'Reader's Digest' etc.

Judging by your writing skill, you likely questioned those points yourself.

A brilliant story, just short of perfect.
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