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Review of Danté Ridgemar  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
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#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon
and good luck.
Your title, rating and genres are good.

You do this very well.
I think it would be hard to have all the lines start with the same letter.
You do it without it being forced.

I love stanza two with all the names you have in it.

Keep writing.
Tammy
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Review of Night Watch  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
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#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon


My Overall impression:
Your title and rating are appropriate.
Your poem flows well and your rhymes work good together.

favorite part:
'Mind and body tuned to a daze,
winter tendrils creeping to the bone,
slowly passing the weary phase,
I no longer feel as if I am alone,'

Love your ending about having a reason to care.

Suggestions/Errors:
Change your static item from other to poetry.

Add some genres, they help your items get exposure.
Relationship, love, drama or experience would work.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Reading*Overall Impressions:
Your title, rating and genres are appropriate.

Very pretty image you have for this.
I love the color you use for this.

Your rhymes work well together.
And your poem flows well.

Unconditional love is hard to find.
This reminds me of my parents and the love I have for my children.

*Smile* Keep writing,
Have a good weekend.
hugs, Tammy


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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Reading*Overall Impressions:
Your title fits well, and who doesn't want to drown in the beauty of nature.
Your rating is appropriate.

Your words flow together well.
The imagery throughout is really good.

I could see nature on this pretty morning.
Even your ending, though sad, is pretty.

*Idea* Suggestions:
Add some genres, they will help your item get exposure.
You could use, family, death, nature, emotional or personal.

*Smile* Keep writing,
Tammy


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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX Open in new Window.

My Overall impression:
Your title, rating and genres are appropriate.

Very pretty poem.
Your memories flow well with each one that you share with your readers.
I love the ending and your special guest.
I like that each memory is personal and unique to you/your family.

This makes your readers conjure up ones they have lost.
Thanks for sharing.

Suggestions/Errors:
Instead of having other, I;d change this static item to prose or even poetry...it flows very well and would fit as either one.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX Open in new Window.

My Overall impression:
I really enjoyed this trip home.
This brings back all kinds of memories for your readers.
It evokes melancholy, sadness but also strength and freedom.

I love your thoughts on owning it all and leaving the bad memories there.
I think this shows you as mature and strong....not many get to go back home and leave like this.

Your rating, title and genres are appropriate.

Suggestions/Errors:
I did not notice any typos or errors.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
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Review of Drusilla  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
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#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon


My Overall impression:
Your title, rating and genres fit well.

I think your twist on this could be funny and entertaining if you expanded a bit on it.

Suggestions/Errors:
I'm not sure this would stand alone...without your reader knowing the Cinderella Story... Maybe add a little background and set this up.

What happens?
You kind of leave your readers hanging at the end.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Star*Thanks for entering your poem in "Invalid ItemOpen in new Window. and good luck.

*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
GREAT title.
You rating and genres are good.

This reminds me of a relationship that I have been in..

I like the parallel of nature and the relationship that you are showing.
It fits very well.

Very dramatic ending.
I like the tick/tock and the long line afterwards...kind of reminds me of a flat-line with the relationship being dead!

I like stanza two the best~ it flows well and I like the image it shows your readers.


*Star*Keep writing.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Star*Thanks for entering your poem in "Invalid ItemOpen in new Window. and good luck.

*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your rating, title and genres are good.

Cute poem.
I like the questions you ask, they evoke your readers to remember!!

I like stanza two the best/ the part about a bug in a jar~~haven't we all did that!?

*Star* MY OPINIONS/SUGGESTIONS:
In line five should remember be remembered?

I wasn't sure what this was in stanza four?
A B.B.Q.,

*Star*Keep writing.

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Review of Twisted  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
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#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon


My Overall impression:
Your title and rating are good.

You show well how your ex has left you feeling.

my favorite lines;
'Look at all the invisible blood I've bled

I'm not gone my mind has drifted'

Suggestions/Errors:
You could add one more genre~relationship, personal or emotional would work.

I think this would benefit with some punctuation~end some of your thoughts, add some commas for some pauses ~I think it would help the flow and help make your thoughts dramatic and overall I think it would help evoke more emotions.
It could also help with your filler words, like and. Try reading your poetry aloud after writing it to see where pauses are needed and to check the flow of it.
ex;
Harsh words and violent blows

Hidden secrets nobody knows

Eyes are open hands are fisted

Deep inside I'm warped and twisted

try
Harsh words, violent blows

Hidden secrets nobody knows.

Eyes are open, hands are fisted

Deep inside I'm warped and twisted.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Review of Visitors  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX Open in new Window.

My Overall impression:
Your rating, title and genres are appropriate.

Unique and slightly creepy way of getting inspiration for your writings!
You end this very well~the last two lines are my favorite part of this.

Suggestions/Errors:
You have one period at the very end of this, I'd remove it or go in and add more punctuation where needed.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Review of Shadows  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon


My Overall impression:
Your title, rating and genres are appropriate.

Your story is believable and well-told.
I wasn't left with any questions.

Suggestions/Errors:
Add some genres to your story, they help it get more exposure.
Mystery, death and horror would work.

I didn't notice any typos or errors.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your rating and title are good.

I like the comparisons you are making in stanza one.
the mustang, gunpowder etc.

I like your ending thoughts about your soul and the choices you have made.

favorite part:
'My mind, bleached white
by attempts at purification,
roams freely where it will'

*Star* MY OPINIONS/SUGGESTIONS:
You could add one more genre.
Bio would be good.

*Star*Keep writing.

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Review of Whither My Soul  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your rating, title and genres are good.

Your use of punctuation in stanza one is effective for pauses and for making your point.
Your rhymes are good and creative.

I put my parents through some rough times too...and think most do in some way or another.
Which is a bit scary because I now have a teenager and a pre-teen!
;0

I like the role of your mother that you show throughout in this.

*Star* MY OPINIONS/SUGGESTIONS:
You have one question mark in the last line..I'd remove it or add more ending punctuation.

This almost feels unfinished~are you going to add more?

*Star*Keep writing.

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Review of Snowflake  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your rating, title and genres are appropriate.

Very pretty words and image you show your readers.
Stanza one sets this up well for the readers to see the snow.

I love the use of the writing ML..I think the colors add to your thoughts here.
I like the flow/read of the poem~it's a steady pace throughout.

Your ending is as sweet as the snowflake on the cheek!

*Star*Keep writing.
Tammy

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Review of For My Son  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX Open in new Window.

My Overall impression:
Your rating, title and genres are appropriate.

I've been through a divorce and I too left for my kids.
It's always hard to look at a situation through the child's eyes but once you do and can clear up what needs to be done. The things we were putting them through was harmful and unfair.

Your poem is truthful and shows you as being a strong woman..for your son!

Suggestions/Errors:
You have some punctuation a couple of ? and period..I'd go through and add punctuation where needed. Close a few more of your thoughts.

So here we are we have moved on
I think this would be a more effective read if you have a comma after are~which would make for a pause there.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Review of All That Glitters  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
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#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon


My Overall impression:
Your title fits well and your rating is appropriate.
Your subtle message on judging comes through well.

I like that you start this out with a strong quote.
Your story flows well and I like the humor you slide in.

Suggestions/Errors:
You could add one more genre~they help your item get exposure.
Comedy would be good.

Maybe expand just a little and tell your readers where this relationship ends...do you guys date any more or end up being friends or??

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
Reviewed by Tammy

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Review of The Night Sky  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX Open in new Window.

My Overall impression:
Your rating, title and genres are appropriate.
Pretty poem, your words just flow together very well.

You paint a beautiful night for your readers in stanza one.
In stanza two you show yourself writing under the stars.
What a great place to be writing and getting inspiration from nature.

Your ending shows you becoming vulnerable and letting go.
I love the line on digging your toes into the sand.
Lines like that make the poem believable.

Your image for this is pretty.
my favorite part:
'Gliding through time on a pencil
and tracing over memories I've stenciled

Thanks for sharing.
I think your readers will identify with these thoughts/feelings that you share with us.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Review of Trees Scream  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
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#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon


My Overall impression:
Your rating, title and genres are effective.

Great poem and it holds such a big message.
I love your ending, the last line with the two sentences is very effective.
That break up of the sentences with the question at the end~is very dramatic.

You capture a tragic part of nature very well.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Star* Overall Impressions;
Great title...what a creative way to describe those special people in your life. Your rating and genres are appropriate.

Very pretty poem....the words and the presentation of it.
Great color, it's bright to go along with your thoughts on them being your light!

What a great tribute to these people that you hold close to your heart.

*Star* Suggestions:
Did you share this with the ones you wrote it for?
If not~~you should.

*Star* Keep writing!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Overall Impressions:

Very pretty blog image.
Great use of the writingML and emoticons.

I like the title you picked for this.
: )

I read through some of the entires but did not go all the way back...and was wondering what is all the pain from?

Suggestions:

My only suggestion would be too add just a little introduction of yourself in the body of this...maybe your name and just a few details for your readers.

Keep writing!
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Review of For A Genius...  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX Open in new Window.

My Overall impression:
Your rating, title and genres are appropriate.

Wow, what a turn of events.
This holds a big message.

You set up your main character really well..with his actions and his conceit.

Suggestions/Errors:
A few areas doesn't really sound like seventeen year olds.
(like the part about him being a socialist...)

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Review of False Alarm  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
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#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon


My Overall impression:
Your rating, title and genres are appropriate.
Your character is likable.
Your story is believable~I just think it needs to be developed a bit more.

Suggestions/Errors:
You really leave your readers hanging with this.
It doesn't feel quite finished.
Maybe expand a little on the ending.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Tammy
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Review of The Spyglass  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your rating, title and genres are appropriate.
I love the humor/word-play you show with the introduction.
Your rhymes are good.
I like the last stanza on her being your queen the best.

*Star* MY OPINIONS/SUGGESTIONS:
This could easily be an image~shape poem with a little adjusting of a few of the lines and this could look like an hourglass!

In the last stanza, I keep stumbling over the first two lines...maybe a comma after rough in th first line.

*Star*Keep writing.

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Review of You and I  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Star*Thanks for entering your poem in "Invalid ItemOpen in new Window. and good luck.

*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your rating, title and genres are appropriate.
Your rhymes work good together.
Great ending thought on the dreams!

favorite lines:
'Your eyes are like my journey, with your hand acting as my guide,
Our love is like a roller coaster, too tempting NOT to ride.'

*Star* MY OPINIONS/SUGGESTIONS:
little things:
Its in line one should be it's.

In line ten, i needs to be capitalized.


*Star*Keep writing.

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