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Review of Heaven applauds  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX " Open in new Window.

*Star* My Overall impression:
Unique title.
Your rating and genres are appropriate.

Great last stanza.

I think you capture the confusion, the pain, the emotions of losing a loved one well.

*Idea* Suggestions/Errors:
I'd suggest adding more description to this, let your readers know/learn more about your loved one. Maybe add a memory or two of your time together. I think that would add to the emotion of this and would help to personalize this a little more.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies.
THE DROP-OFF BOX  Open in new Window. (13+)
Monthly newbie contest.
#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon


*Star* My Overall impression:
Your title is good and should draw your readers in.

Your emotions come through strong at the end.

*Idea* Suggestions/Errors:
Add some genres, they help your item get exposure.
Romance/love, drama, personal, experience or emotional would work.

You skip around a bit with this, you go from needing and loving to breaking and hating...???
Mayb set it up a bit. Was this couple ever together or?
It leaves the reader with questions.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
Reviewed by Tammy
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Review of Memories  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Star*Thanks for entering
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#1215871 by Tornado Day Author IconMail Icon
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Overall Impressions:
Your rating, title and genres are good.

Parts of this made me think of my own childhood. I too can remember rolling down a favorite hill. And making homemade icecream.

Very good read, I enjoyed your story and the memories it evoked in me!

Very good question you ask at the end.
Makes me wonder and think even about my children and what are they going to look back and remember. We live a 1,000 miles from family. I just have to hope the family nights and times we have are enough...plus the yearly vacations we take back home!

Errors/Suggestions*Idea*

Need a space between para s three and four (from the end.)

*Star*Keep writing!
Tammy
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Star*Thanks for entering
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#1215871 by Tornado Day Author IconMail Icon
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Overall Impressions:
Your rating and genres are good.

I like the way you present this in italics and color~it flows well and is whimsical.

Errors/Suggestions*Idea*
Maybe set this up a little more.
Is this a mental or phsical place that you go?
Who is He?

Long title, I think I'd make it To The Garden.

*Star*Keep writing!
Tammy
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Review of Haze  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies.
THE DROP-OFF BOX  Open in new Window. (13+)
Monthly newbie contest.
#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon


*Star* My Overall impression:
Your title, rating and genres are appropriate.

What I like best about this poem is you never really say what could or is in there.
So I think that each reader will put their own fear and place in there!

Cool read, I like the way you repeat the one line.
Makes it dramatic and a little scary!

I like the descriptions you have, the child's painting, the blood soaked hands..the bile/puss ~ YUCK.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.

Keep writing!
Reviewed by Tammy
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies. "THE DROP-OFF BOX " Open in new Window.

*Star* My Overall impression:
Your title, genres and rating are appropriate.
Very inspirational read.
We all have our fears/ some we conquer, soem we don't.

Great description in para one, had me right there beside Kendra.
Facing one's fear is always hard. What a beautiful sight waited for her though!

Your story flows well and I wasn't left with any questions.

*Idea* Suggestions/Errors:
I kind of want to know more aout Kendra and Max...have you thought of expanding on this or writing a follow-up?

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
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Review of Steps and Stories  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Star*Thanks for entering your poem in
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*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your rating, title and genres are all good.

I think these words will get your readers to tracing back steps and to remembering their own childhood memories!

I like that each stanza holds a memory!
I like that each steps takes you to a different thought.
Very unique way to write this.

I wonder do all old basements have Mason jars in them!!!
lol


*Star*Keep writing.
Reviewed by Tammy
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Review of Silhouette  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for entering you poem in
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Your title, rating and genres are appropriate.

Great form-you stick to it well.
Great comparisons throuhgout; the smoke/fuzzy concept, the pain and wire!!

I like stanza two the best, it gives the reader an image and sound!

suggestions:
You might leave a brief author's note explaining the form to your readers.

Keep writing.
Reviewed BY Tammy
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Review of CRUSH HOUR  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Star*Thanks for entering your poem in
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*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your title, rating and genres are good.

I like the comparisons and descriptions that you use to tell this story on riding the train in London.

I could easily see people packed on trying to make it to work on time!

I like the pace for this, it is steady and upbeat.
Your rhymes work well together.

favorite part:
With textured air like grated cheese
Germs surf the breeze of each wet sneeze.
YUCK! But great description!

*Star*Keep writing.
Reviewed BY Tammy
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Rated: E | (4.5)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
WELCOME to WDC!!

Your title is unique and your rating and genres are good.

Sorry for your loss.
I hoped it helped a little to write this.
Writing is an awesome way to express your feelings.

my favorite part:
Am I physically raptured or is this all in my head?
Can I touch the surface of what I do not know?
Will it come alive for me and tell me where to go?

I like the ending about your soul being left adrift, I felt like this when my mom passed. I think your readers will easily be able to identify with your thoughts and feelings in this.

Keep writing!

Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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Review of The One I Love  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Your title and rating are good.

Sweet/romantic poem.
Your ending remark/questions are straight to the point and worded well!

*Star*SUGGESTIONS:
Add some genres to your poem, they help your items get more exposure. Love/romance, personal, experience or emotional would work.

I would go through and spell out you and you~instead of u and ur. It just looks better!

Keep writing!

Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Flower1* Welcome to the site. Hope you enjoy it. Thanks for entering The Drop Box, my contest for newbies.
THE DROP-OFF BOX  Open in new Window. (13+)
Monthly newbie contest.
#530577 by Tammy~Catchin Up~ Author IconMail Icon


*Star* My Overall impression:
Your rating, title and genres are good.

Wow...this is very deep and full of emotions.
Makes you wonder how many suicides
could actually be accidents..?

I like how you show the blood in the mud in stanza two~great imagery.

*Idea* Suggestions/Errors:
Maybe include a prevention website at the end of this..so if anyone who is reading this has these kind of thoughts they could check it out.

*Flower1* Hope you enjoy yourself here. Any questions, e-mail me.
Keep writing!
Reviewed by Tammy
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Review of Me, Myself and I  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
HA!!
lol
I loved this.

I like the image that you start with and that you put this in red!!

I like the different sides you show to a woman.
How many of us are really like this and keep it hidden.....

You're no nightmare!!
What I see/feel~~YOU are one of the most creative people I know, not to mention kind, funny, supportive and very sweet!!

My favorite part:
Would you think me a threat, if I made a suggestion?
Thought up some idea, was able to do something you couldn't?
Would I be less of a woman if I spoke my mind?
Made you do the things I'm supposed to do?

Keep writing!

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Your rating, title and genres are all appropriate.
Awesome tribute.

This poem applies to so many men and women today.
The unsung heroes that fight for us all.

I like how you show the soldier as being brave yet timid and unsure. And you show that they don't know all they fight for or for whom they fight for, they just do it.

Your image is a bit disturbing but fits so well.


Keep writing!

Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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Review of A Bushel of Tales  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Hi there!
I came to look around your port, since it's been SO long since I had time to. I couldn't even get past your first folder here.

I love the image and your little poem on what your folder holds.
It's very inviting and makes the reader want to explore it all.

I like that you have your merit badges on display too. I have a folder or two that I have mine it too!

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Rated: E | (4.5)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
WELCOME to the site!!

Your rating, title and genres all fit well.

Very short, cute read. It would be just the right length to keep a child's attention!

Your story flows well.
I think any little kid starting school would enjoy having this read to them.

*Star*SUGGESTIONS:
I did not notice any typos or errors.

Have you thought about writing anymore on Brandon? Maybe focus on his firsts...first playmate, first time at recess, first...you see where I am going with it.

Keep writing!

Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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Review of Dream-Giver  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
WELCOME to the site.
Your rating, title and genres are good.

I like how you start this off with a question, and of course the reader wants to know the answer!

What a tragic, sad read.

I like the ending, where you show you each as being the dream-giver.

*Star*SUGGESTIONS:
I was a little confused about how long she had the cancer, was it only for two weeks that you knew about it...? Because that really wouldn't be long to carry a 'burden.'

Keep writing!

Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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Review of Damned  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
WELCOME to WDC!

Your title should be effective at drawing your readers in.
Very well written poem, I had to read it straight through the first time.
You capture the reader with these lines.

I love how you do the last four lines of each stanza.
Your ending executes this as you have her!

*Star*SUGGESTIONS:
You need to rate your item.

Keep writing!

Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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Review of Trance  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Good morning, and thanks for sending me a link to your story.
Very unique story.
The plot is unusual but realistic.

Your rating, title and genres are all good.

*Star*SUGGESTIONS:
which if sold will bring more profit than
I think will should be would.

Maybe at the beginning expand a little about why your character hates life, that would make what he ends up doing more believable.


Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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Review of REMEMBER WHEN  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Very sweet poem.
I love your ending, I have so many memories that I hope never fade.

Both my parents are gone, so this was a bittersweet read.
But I could easily identify with these growing years.
The grounding, the guidance, my rebellion!

I've enjoyed your port.
YOU rock!!

Keep writing!
*Heart*hugs, Tammy*Heart*
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Review of IMPURE ANGELS  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Great title.

Good question in stanza one, we all find our self asking this question....usually more than once in life!

Another dramatic read.
Your last stanza ends this in a very powerful way!

*Star*SUGGESTIONS:
You could remove the image link at the top since it's no longer a valid link.

In line two should depth be depths?

Keep writing!

Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Star*Thanks for entering your poem in
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#962569 by Not Available.
and good luck.

*Star* OVERALL IMPRESSION:

Your title, rating and genres are appropriate.
Your poem flows very well.
Your imagery is good throughout.

Nice form and you do it well.
Thanks for including the link to this form in your poem for your readers.

Pretty image and it fits your poem very well. I like the bench where one can sit and enjoy!!

I love the ending.
ANd hope to one day just do more of that myself!


*Star*Keep writing.
Tammy
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Review of Metamorphosis  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Your title is unique. Your rating is appropriate.

I like stanza three and your thoughts on having a fence around your heart.

What a romantic poem on finding new love.

*Star*SUGGESTIONS:
You could add one more genre, they help to get your items exposure.
Emotional or experience would work.

Keep writing!

Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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Review of Looking glass  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
WELCOME to the site.

What a LOUD wakeup call for this man!!

Your rhymes work well together and your poem's pace is pretty steady throughout.

*Star*SUGGESTIONS:
Why do you have every line ending the same....?
Maybe add some ending punctuation.

But if you need answers stare in my eyes…
try
But if you need answers stare into my eyes…


Keep writing!

Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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Review of Reality of life  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (3.5)

*Star*OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Your title, rating and genres are appropriate.

You briefly show your readers how you feel about life.
I like your line about taking on life!

*Star*SUGGESTIONS:
In the last line I would spell out you.

Your rhymes seem forced in places.
Maybe just write what you feel and not worry about the rhymes
As it is, it seems almost impersonal.

Keep writing!

Reviewed by Tammy*Heart*
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