I enjoyed your story, it was quite an interesting fable balance between good and evil, how they balance one another out, because with out good, their can not be any evil,. however you left out certain words but that can easily be fixed with quick proof reading. good job and write on, kitty luster.
I enjoyed your story, it was unique and interesting, I liked the way you took something ordinary that child would not normallly be afraid of like fairies made them into, and showed them sometimes fairies are not always friendly. great job, write on. kitty luster
I liked your story very much, it is very sad and endearing,and in a way we all we could recieve some form of a form a message from our loved ones. write on. kitty luster
great story, i enjoyed it very much, I enjoy ghost stories they are so fun to read and to tell, but of course I enjoy being scared. so scare away, and write on. kitty luster.
I like this version, its realistic and it kept me interested to the very end. I like the fact that you took something special like family togetherness and the love of family and made it ominous. good work. write on. kitty luster.
I liked your story very much it kept me on the edge of my seat until the end however your story felt rushed in some parts especially in the beginning which felt like it was missing something, but I do that to, keep writing kitty luster.
I enjoyed your story, it kept and held my attention to the very end, I hope that you add the police man's side to this story it would be quite interesting. kitty.luster
I enjoyed your story it was quite interesting to read, it was realistic and it kept me riveted to my seat until the very end, you know have good horror story when you make your audience jump at shadows, good job, however I hope I see more of your work. gracie sands.
I enjoyed your story very much it was realistic and you have brought a new idea to the horror genre. keep writing because the more you do the better you'll get. k.l. breyer
your story is original and quite interesting. It captured my attention. I enjoyed what the story was about an egyptian myth there are few stories that are based on any type of myth. keep writing the more you do it the better you'll get. k.l. breyer
This is a great love story however when I first decided to read it I thought it would be a ghost love story, the story line leads the reader to believe this. keep writing though because the more you do it the better you'll become. k.l. breyer
Your story was good and it touched on a genre that's seems to be fading, however in the first part of the story you seem to overstate the fact that these past twenty years you did this or that, You should only state this once, giving the story more of a believable concept, I have trouble spell checking to however it still needs to be done. keep writing though because the more you do it, the better you'll get.k.l. breyer
your story was very good and kept me riveted it can either be a drama or horror. I would like to see which direction you take this story in. keep writing. k.l. breyer.
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