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Review by Thundercroft Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very inspiring quote that made me think. I really like the connection between Earth and us, and the illusions to other parts of life, and the connection to the rain. The only thing I would really change would be to use the return key and place 'to come back to life' on a third line for readability purposes. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this!
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Review by Thundercroft Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is quite good! There is a lot of good details, and the writing is very solid and a pleasure to read. However, it would be very nice if there was more of a conclusion at the end, something to tie us back to the beginning of this, to continue the first statements. Other than that, a few less uses of 'remember' would make this excellent! Good job!
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