How do I get the chapbook? I like the way your work sounds, the wording flows and not everyone can do that. Precision of phrase and the menagerie of wordliness make hors doevres for ganglions. "The static aria of birds?" Why use the capital here? "tissu trapeze" did you mean "tissue?" I always love to see good abstraction and beautiful dada.
Nice ryhme scheme and good use of images. Exceptional progression from light to dark: "sparkle-glow-sing" turns to "goodnight-fools-shadows." The beginning undergrowth buried alludes well to dark grime at the end. Pleasing and admirable.
I use the subject of people as trees in my paintings, so I automatically like this piece. Some minor revisions you may consider are: giving Elm "sheltering wings" and letting Maple "shed fire." Change "Yet" to "Though Douglas fir soars to forest heights, the unlikely, stunted Bristlecone still has much in common." Over the years doesn't Redwood brave "many a fire?" The ending is beautiful. Thank you for sharing this.
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