Hello Jacky! For this to be a flash fiction I am greatly surprised at the thought of needing more. Even with the simple form of it so far I find that I already adore the characters. Mae being a well rounded adult figure in Sandy's like and sandy being just as adorable as most readers wish for in a younger character. I indeed think that you pushed that across perfectly! I think that the only improvement I would like to see would be for you to keep an eye out on where you place commas for dialogue. Dialogue can be tricky to get the hang off so that it doesn't come across flat and awkward. However, I believe that you got this!
Hello Malex! To start off I would like to say that I enjoy this premise a lot. The idea of there being a interview that goes in depth with the characters from popular amines is extremely creative. I don't often see things written in the script style that is pulled off as eloquently as this. With that being said there are only a few grammar mistakes that I took notice too. Along with one minor adjustment, it was a bit hard to follow in some areas. One tip that I would give is a decent proof read. Sometimes we miss things ourselves and it is better to have an outside mind to read it. Kind of like a beta. All together I think that you could be on a great road! Keep up the writing! Keep improving and from one anime fan to another Go beyond....Plus Ultra!
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