I thought the story was a nice mixture of humor and what I perceived to be a statement on society today. Whether that was intended or not, I'm not 100% sure. Overall, I thought it was a solid short story but nothing too memorable. I felt like there was something missing in the writing that would have made it stand out a bit more. Perhaps a few more words or better spacing; I'm not sure exactly what it was missing but I could tell it wasn't what it could have been.
I will say that I wouldn't mind seeing Carol Johnson's story going forward and perhaps get a comedic follow-up to where she landed after her "historic" failure.
I agree with your message on hate. It is the worst part of this world and should be used towards the most vile of people/things if it is even to be used at all. It sounds like you have your mind in the right place and realize that there is a good message to be sent by getting the word out there and knocking it to the ground.
I did find that your writing ran together a bit. It probably could have been turned into a few paragraphs and would have come together much better. And while I see that you understand the illness of the word and feeling of hate, I would have liked to have seen you resolve your feelings with it and perhaps offer a solution to avoid getting caught up in it.
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