My heart sank while reading this. Was she actually trying to drown or are you using drowning as a metaphor? Either way, this is truly an exceptional poem. I do not have any criticisms about the writing style or technique, since it is your own and you are writing this for someone. I have read another poem by you, about turning forty, and that too was well written. You are a wonderful writer and I will definitely be reading more of your work.
I must say, this poem is absolutely touching. I felt sadness and grief, which is oddly a great thing because it means your writing is great! The only criticism I must give, is some punctuation errors (in my opinion). In the second stanza, third line "Fear is her enemy. She'll never learn"., I would have used a semi-colon: "Fear is her enemy; she'll never learn" since it leads into the next line. Other than that, your poem was fantastic! I will definitely read more.
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