I liked the way the drip, drip made me hold my breath, as I was waiting to find out what was wrong until the "I remember" comes spilling out in a flood. The rhythm was very good. I wondered if she actually died or if she left The end says "I died with her" but why is he trying to forget if she is dead? Wouldn't he want to remember? Maybe I am being too literal.
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