This is filled with emotions, the instances and how you write about them make things so credible. The touching of fingers, patting of the blanket, all evoke such great imagery. I just feel that the in the first stanza, I got confused about what reached to the knees, but I guess it is silly of me, may be the poetic magic would be disturbed by further specification,
This is so relevant. I think you capture wonderfully in this lyrical piece how we should look back and desire the same joy of all holidays and events that has simply gone amiss. It's so upsetting. The call for love, innocence and true happiness in this piece can and should be sung because it would truly touch hearts!
Wow! This is really very touching! I never could let my attention wander to the ending as I was so gripped by each and every line. However, the ending just makes this 5 stars from four and I especially love how everything falls into place, really well done! Want to point out a flaw, but this is just too heart wrenching for that, enjoyed it!
I think this poem describes my life right now, as I am struggling with sleeplessness and have turned to writing and reading. You have used rhyme well here, because it feels natural. The style and tone is casual, which really stays relevant with the subject, and mood of the poem. The repetitive use of conjunctions broke the flow for me a little, other than that, well done!
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