A well expressed and opinionated piece with excellent and suitable examples. It was quite effective describing not just the fact that we need a moment of clarity but that of which we need to learn specifically, whether or not that was intended, such as to think before we act and to make use of our common sense in general, and the need to show empathy and equality to our fellow man. To reiterate the well placed quotes and examples, the use of the round table to express equality and the atomic bomb for our need to think before we act were perfectly placed. I personally took a shine to the implemented quote of Plato and the philosophers and kings, it was a very nice touch. The only advice I dare give is to use different words with similar meanings so as to not use the same word too many times too close together and wear out it's impact. I'm primarily talking about the consistent use of the phrase "moment of clarity," whilst repetition can be a powerful tool in expressing your opinion it can also have the complete opposite effect if used too frequently.
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