That was great, thanks for writing your poem. I bet it would make a great song also. I have been married for 20 years and I still remember the days when we dated. smile.
My favorite part of your poem was this part.
Maybe one day I will smile looking on the past,
Ten years is forever yet it vanishes so fast,
This part brought tears to my eyes. Our life is in the middle of kids,work and life. YES, 10yrs is forever yet it vanishes so fast. Next thing you know its 20.
Keep up the great work.
Tasia.
I loved your poem. I am one that loves trees to. I was very moved by your poem.
I thought it flowed very well and I enjoyed reading every single word.
I like the second to last paragraph the most, it just grabbed me and I found myself soaring with
the leaves on the wind. It was very exciting.
Thank you for writing this poem.
Tasia.
Aww I liked your poem it was very sweet. I wish someone would of sent me a nice poem like that when I was single..
Over all I thought it was good, Poetry is not really my thing. I understood everything except the first paragraph about the winter.
The last 6 lines are my favorite. I hope this helped.
Keep on writing.
Tasia.
That was really good. It was a real page turner for me. It was very funny to. I loved the part about the swingset . We have a 18 yr old son getting ready to move out after Graduation , So I can understand your characters father very well. Half of our shop/garage is full and I mean full of his stuff. I would rather take it all to the dump myself lol.. But I don't want to be a mean mom, so we will give him some time to move it out.
Keep up the great work.
Sincerely
Tasia.
I liked your story, but I found it very depressing.
For now, it seems in your story that there is no hope.
My son is always going on about the great zombie takeover in
the near future. Good grief I hope not.
I think you have the beginning of a great story.
Tasia. :)
That was awsome. I had goosbumps the whole time I was reading and had to go and get tissues because I started to cry. Smile.
What a wonderful poem, I enjoyed everything but the last sentance. Where is the Rest??
I used to love unicorns when I was 11, before I liked boys. I drew them all the time and your poem brought back that long forgotten love.
Thank you for writing that wonderful poem.
I hope you are writing more.
Tasia. :)
WOW, that was a good poem for a very bad situation.
I really am not into poetry , but I liked the power and truth that you put into this one.
Thank you for writting it.
I really liked that last paragraph . It means alot to me and speaks volumes to the world.
Sincerely
Tasia
Oh my gosh , your going to make me cry. I think I was living in Brunswick Main that year your speaking of.
My father was in the Navy, we had orders to move to Tennisee and that storm hit the night before we had to leave. My dad had to go out my bedroom window the next morning to shovel out the front door. So yeah, I can totally relate to your past.
You wrote it very well and I enjoyed every moment with you, in your past.
Thank you for sharing such great memories.
Sincerely
Tasia714
I loved the beginning of your story, it gets you right into the story.
Bosco seems like a nice dog.
I found the part where he is talking about his birthday and his day at the office a bit confusing. You have lots of details and that is good.
But I kept waiting for the spooky email to pay out. That must be your suspence build up.
Well, I will look back to see the next part of your story, I would like to know what the spooky email is.
Have a nice day.
P.S
This is the first review I have ever writen.:)
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