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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi my name is Tara your story has a grate little twist I though you do need to work on it a bet more I fond it hared to stay focused but then again it’s early and I am still drinking my first cup of coffee. I stile think you can do belter. The correctors are grate and so is the plot but the flow not so much. I do not rely know what to suggest other then re reading it and shortening some of it by rewording it. Other than that you did grate I do not know yet if I like the fact that it is all vartrole realty or not but that’s a grate unexpected twist.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi my name is Tara and I injoyed this though I am not normly one to like books like sart track this held my atinton. I did notice that you repited love quite a few times in this paragragh. this is just a sujiston on how to mabe inprove it some.

She loved almost every thing about the place the squalor and the ancient, the rough-hewn tables that stank of years of malt and whiskey. The dirty glasse, and weapons on every hip and last but not least the battered, crusty-eyed spacers that looked ready to cough up a lung or die of the Plague.
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