I liked the first person version. I felt that it really got the main character's point of view down and helped me understand how the main character was feeling.
Even though this was a very short short story, you still really managed to convey emotion well! It really added to the drama that we didn't know what he was being injected with or why. It was a really great piece.
I thought this was beautiful.I love The Notebook! At first I thought it was from Noah's perspective, but then I was pleasantly surprised when it was Allie's!
This is really cool! I'm in high school and I still fear what's under the bed! I don't think that anyone really grows out of being afraid of what they don't know. Sometimes you just have to look under the bed in order to sleep soundly.
I really liked the story, especially the plot twist at the end. My only complaint is that there were some grammar errors that could be fixed. But overall, it was a great story!
I really loved the tragic tone to the poem. I thought the lines "It stood strong against mistrust/But it finally fell limp with your brutality" were beautiful. However, I feel that it could have used more punctuation.
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