Only my Opinion: Wow, this is a very complex, beautiful, sad, and at times mystifying piece of writing. I can relate to the message you seem to be sending out to your children; I too have found that later in life there is no handbook, no books or courses with which to help us through. Your writing in this piece is very deep, very complex...it took me reading it through four times to truly understand how the complexity of your language really is the beauty of this piece. The relationships you write about so effortlessly falsify your belief that you have no words...? I think that you have much to write about, and with continued 'chapters' to this piece your children will have a beautiful "legacy," or "reminder" about their mother when your time to go home arrives. Keep writing, you have real talent, just keep writing from your heart. One final question: is the word "quilt" a typo? I thought perhaps you meant "guilt?" Really, this is the only possible fault in the flowing logic of your piece. I look forward to reading more from you. Great Job!
Syrianna
Just my Opinion: Wow, you have a really great grasp for utilizing rich, flowing language and unique phrasing. I really liked this piece; I wish in all honesty I could truly understand the depths which I know are within your writing. I feel the fault must be mine, for after rereading this several times, I still come away with a deep appreciation of the message, but I could not tell you which of these beautiful lines made the point. That is a very desirable trait in an author - I believe, for it is not the "parts" in themselves that make this so beautiful, but the "gestalt" which rewards the reader (the sum of all the parts). I will look forward to reading more of what you write. Thanks
Syrianna
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