Excellent. The use of realistic dialogue really gives this story character. Something that many of these types of stories don't have. The way a typical teenager would think about free will is also a great touch. If there is one minor edit I would suggest, it would be to elaborate more on certain parts of the story. For example, why, if Andrew is such a slacker, is he in the enriched class to begin with? Other than that, a truly great read. Well done!
This interactive is fantastic. The characters are well written for the most part, the story is vivid, and the interactive is well serviced by dedicated authors. There is some continuity errors and person shifts, but that is to expected with such a large interactive. I look forward to your other work, Bobo.
Have a good day,
Jademaster56
A great short story. It was perhaps a little difficult to understand, especially in regards to the end, but I like your writing style and hope that you continue to write here. It may sound cheesy and pathetic, but believe me when I say that I enjoyed it. Cheers!
A impressive piece, a bit confusing with constantly switching first and second person, but overall an awesome piece. This author should do more works similar to this one. Jademaster56 eagerly awaits for the next story and Is confident in 12345's ability to write another epic interactive body swap story!
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