Hi there,
It was lovely reading this piece of poetry. Lovely, not in the sense of it being uplifting or happy, but in the sense of it being so beautifully true to itself. The mood is constant, the rhyme is certain. the rythm is easy and well defined. The depth of the gloom and intensity of depression are not in a climax, but with the reader since the beginning. I also like the fact that not too many hard facts are stated in the poem. Good work and keep it up.
Wow! I mean really really wow! I loved your style of writing and think you are a fantastic writer. The flow is perfect, the characters are round, the plot is gripping! I cannot see anything here which is less than perfect! The title itself seems like an understatement of what is to come though. Keep writing....it seems to be your calling :) Good luck!
Wow, this one I like. A very sharp, quick and smart verse. I love the way you have used poetry to describe something that is the opposite of poetry...politics! Kudos!
Hi Tom. I have just finished reading your story and I must say, I am impressed. The time frame seems to real. The movement of characters and the plot is so fluid. Although completely fictional, the story is believable and very well written. The facts seem simple and logical, which adds to the thrill of knowing that This may Happen! I think you have a certain flair for writing science fiction, a difficult field indeed. Good luck with future projects!
Wow! James, your writing is so fluid! The time, the space, the darkness, all seem to real. The plot is simple, with a climax which leaves you wondering about what really happened to the poor protagonist. The character and dialogue, again very intricately thought out. What I also liked was the fact that the day and time is clear and concise to the reader although it isnt so to the character himself. This avoids the confusion that a lot of short stories generate. Kudos! Keep writing!
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