Great story. I felt the stress at the beginning and what appeared to be a natural conclusion. The story wonderfully described a portion of someone's life doing exactly what they were meant to do. Awesome read!
I was mesmerized by the story in First Person!! I am sure part of that can be accounted to the fact I read that version first (wonderful story), but I definitely lean towards the first person. I would love to read more of Tamrhy's story. Is there more on this site?
A very heartfelt melancholy piece. I love the way it flows - beautiful. It is great that it has some encouraging words with the wisp of sadness. A chance to smile going down the slide with the other kids and then cry at length and all alone. Awesome work!
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