I find this to be so painfully correct. When you want to write but can not seem to find an idea to run with. Try beginning with the idea of a starry night sky, you seemed quite passionate about it in the second stanza of the poem. I also suggest writing about something that happened or something your thinking about, I find my best work emerges when I think of ways to put my thoughts into poetry.
I love your poem! You are very talented. I can tell that you are extremely dedicated to your religion. I encourage you to write more. Your work is eye opening and sobering and the last line:
"The Armor of God, for all"
I feel like you're trying to spread the message "God loves you! He wants to defend you!" I feel that message were sent very well and I feel that it was also very well executed. I am going to encourage you to continue writing. I feel that you have a special talent for this.
I love your poem! I love the buildup to the last line:
"Envy me... for I met and made one of these angels my wife."
You obviously have thought about this a lot, and the words you rhyme with are very good. I also like how you rhymed the last line of each stanza with the one above it and in sets of two. All in all I feel you really tied your poem up nicely, continue your amazing and inspiring work. :)
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