AAAAND THE WHEELS HAVE FALLEN OFF THE BUS
Writing a story is not about making demands. Writing a story is about making something, and then sharing it with the world if you so choose. So here what we have instead is you demanding others write you a story instead on contribute to a real story on the site.
This story has been out for a while now, so I suppose it's fair to come in with a rating and review. Bear in mind I am open to changing my rating based on how the interactive progresses. For now however:
-The title and description are already not meaningful. Who is Brienna? Why do I care? What about her being a giantess? We have hundreds of these stories on this site, so some detail is helpful here before choosing one.
-The intro before the first chapter really has no need to repeat "Brienna is", but more importantly, Brienna has no personality nor anything beyond some sizes that are likely moot anyway since she's going to grow soon.
-The first chapter is short and meaningless. While choice chapters can be fine, since the free account limits one to 10 stories, you don't expand on any of them. This reeks of the too-common "I have a fetish, write me a story!" seen around here. Also, nobody should have to click to find out what the scenarios are. The chapters don't even have titles.
-The maze of choice chapters is asking for even more trouble. Not every detail needs to be decided. If someone isn't satisfied with what size you choose to write about, they can always write their own porno.
Some issues:
1-You wrote 1 chapter and left
2-There's a chapter added that is purely spam
3-No actual content is ever added. Choice chapters make up the entirety of this work.
Really, I don't need to write this out. One would hope you can figure out on your own why this is terrible writing. You receive one star, and may god have mercy on your soul.
As far as I can tell, everything beyond the first chapter has been written by someone else, so I'm not entirely sure what kind of review you are seeking. You have five characters, but beyond one being a rich bitch, they all seem to be roughly the same. Physical characteristics are great and all, but nobody's about to remember all five. In erotica, anyway, odds are people are imagining their own versions anyway, so the distinctions between the five, especially if they don't interact are meaningless.
Also, some moderation of your story would be nice. Some contributors have not been using paragraphs, and some chapters have choices like "Continue" five times which is hardly a meaningful choice.
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