Very short. Also brings to light only one of the problems with the health care system. Medical professionals being overworked can be a VERY big problem for the patient. Thankfully you had another doctor there to take over when you no longer could.
As for grammar and the like, no problems that I noted.
Honestly, I like the general idea of it. There were some of the ideas that I found a little off. I'm not sure if it was your intention, but the main character seems a bit narcissistic, bordering on schizophrenic. If that was the idea, then you nailed it. If not, you may want to look back over it. I think it might improve the story a bit if maybe the main characters attitude toward himself and others is changed as he views the lives of the people his death affected. Maybe a better title would be After Death?
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