Hey this was good! I know you told me to skip the prologue and read the ch1, but I'm the sort who does what she was told not to do. Don't worry I will still read the ch1 and rate and review.
I think the flow is good in your writing. Also the balance between the description and the story pprogression is good. Also you managed to explain things without taking the reader off with the story. I think it's good.
The characters are well drawn, too, considering this is a very short prologue.
I was intrigued by the 1920s Persia premis. Is this someone's real diary? or a work of fiction? I think it'll be a better read, if there was more description of Persia, I want to see the world through her eyes. The story doesn't end here right? I think this is a promising beginning to a longer story.
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