I absolutely loved it! The rythm was really nice and so were the choice of words.I dont see any flaws,atleast not that I can think of any.The last stance was the best.Keep up the good work and keep writing! I'll stay updated, and waiting to read some more of this.
Nicely done.I guess I saw something similar in glee.The strong had always preyed on the weak,taking advantage,thinking they are superior.But the weak here stands up for himself at last but just not in the right way.The short descriptions of emotions are pretty good.Liked it!
It was a rather cute story where Karalee's teddies Ruff and Tumble were considered to be her guardians.Perhaps she was lonely to have to pretend that they were her guardians or maybe she was a young girl which is not really mentioned.The story took a tragic turn of events,which was rather unexpected by me.Good job!
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