I think that this is a great start to something. I can see that you want to push passed fake people and hold you own. My suggestion is to let the poem flow. Don't force the rhyme, let it happen naturally. If you’re struggling to write and find a flow, I suggest that you keep writing the stanzas until you find the natural rhythm. Great start. My thought on a title could be “stand my own.”
I appreciated your writing style as it is similar to how mine used to be! I liked the journey that you described in this piece because I couldn't quite see where you were taking me. It feels familiar enough that it could have been something I wrote myself. Your punctuation and pauses I believe work well in capturing the meaning and thoughtfulness. Well done.
As I read your work, I must say I judged it a bit. As a professional who stares at resumes several times a year....I find the validity of them important. With that in mind, I truly did appreciate what your piece was saying. I enjoyed your challenges to real life references and how a resume plays out to families and the legacies that we leave. In particular, I appreciated your quirky humor that appeared to be strategically placed.....well done. Refreshing!
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