I was attracted to the story by two things: the issue of what normal education do to men, and the character that chalenged his fate. I liked it. there are some uncommon words, I wish you could replace them with more suitable words. Also I think there is too much intervening by the speaker, which has made me a little distracted. I wish you the best with your ideas and stories.
Good sense of humanity, of the universe, and of mutual fate. It makes me look with the author as if I share the same spot. I only have some difficulty to understand that sentence " where it belongs." How it connects to previous sentence. I hope I did not miss a thing. Go ahead with your writing.
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