i guess this is not where the story's starting from and definitely not the end, so far so good, i like the story, i have my reservation but the story line is too good to be criticized, please write on!
i appreciate the fact that it all began with a dirty cup in the sink and it ended there.
thanks for sharing
This is the second time I'm reading your work. i'm at work reading and i kept laughing and laughing and my colleges just couldn't understand why.
i like your work cos it is original, it's not just some kind of fantasy , it is a humorous normal life illustration, please keep it up.
i now understand love but then, it doesn't have to be that bad, you could use words like: ' please remain some hot water for me' and you could say it jokingly
this is very funny, i appreciate humor and i wonder how you must have felt to be interrupted over and over again by a knock on the door from people who could sell ice to an Eskimo. Beautiful write up, you can only keep it up. Simple, well done! and the next time you get those annoying knocks, please call me
Yes it is full of suspense, it is intriguing and very captivating. this is a beautiful creativity but you left us thinking and wondering what the victim must have done and in my own opinion; this dis your own story, you should be the one to paint a picture for us. the suspense will be there, still, you can give us a picture of what caused his fate. for instance, I imagine that he discovered that his wife was his boss's lover and he found out and killed his wife. you could have written something short, scintillating and full of suspense, still leaving us to wonder about a whole lot of things, and then what in a clear picture what caused his fate
Your write up must have won or be among the top ten or five, KEEP IT UP
You are so heartless, i feel for that person, for the person has lost a soul to a erson so heartless. the trith is, this is what happens to us when we fall stupidly in love with the wrong person. i'm so sorry for this person
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