i love the imagery and i find myself relating to this poem, the rhyming is a smidge off bits here and there dont seem to flow naturally but other than that it was awesome keep writeing (:
its a good read your right about the rhyming the problem is that it seems to forced almost as if you putt any words just so it would rhyme i sometimes do that when i cant find a word thats the best rhyming option
i love the imagary i can just picture it in my head it has meaning it tells this story thay seems different in everyones mind all you need to fix is the rhyming
really great poem, its so cute, and your use of high vocabulary makes the visual image come to life, i just wish it was longer, its like it was so good then Bam it was finished
the words are really nice, the meaning is so beautiful, theres no reason to think uou should edit it its really good, i love who she knows she is meant to be with him, even though she hasnt met him yet very cool :)
thats really good, and so true love how it rhymes and how the words just fit with eachother, the only tiny thing i can say negativly is it could of been longer, it was really good i didn't want it to end =D keep writing
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