wow that was pretty good. I gotta admit, this is much better then some of the stuff I've seen on other sites. I noticed a few minor errors, but it was just a few apostrophes missing and a 1 or 2 commas, and it didn't seem to cause any confusion for me. You did a good job and I'd say you should make more chapters, showing Naomi and Natasha's friendship grow (literally!). Maybe someone finds out about them?
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