Your story says just what I think a stuffed animal would say. I enjoyed it, I have a special stuffed bear that I cuddle when I am upest. I think every one from childern to adults will find this a moving story.
This story can be quite good, but you have a lot of mistakes.You contradict yourself several times and it takes to long to get to the point of the story. You are only 13 so you have p;enty of time to make this a great story. I give you credit you had me on the edge of my seat wanting to know more. Keep writting but keep learning as well. I look forward to seeing the rest of this story.
This is an interresting concept, and is fair as much as you have.It needs mor depth, more information, If you go back and add more to this piece ,it will be much better.
Dont give up, hang in there.
This is a very good story,but you had a contradiction. At the start you said thar the problems with dad would be fixed, then at the end you said that you were in Heaven with your dad. This is confusing to the reader,at least it was to me. If you fix this one thing it will be a better story.
Well story is cute but at the top it says about a girl names Morgan, but in the story you call he Keegan. I am confussed. You stopped to soon what happend when she peeked. As I said cute story needs work.
What a wonderful way to tell the story of Jesus. It has been said that at the time of His birth the animals could talk, I would even bet that they can talk today if we would just listen. Thank you for writing this,as you can see I liked it very much.
For a first draft it is pretty good, but needs some explanation of the diapperance of the little girl and what brought him to this woman. It did grab my intrest so with a little more it will be very goos.
This is a very good story, it griped me from the very first line. Iam not good at given reviews, but I do know I would like to read the rest of it.
To me if the story grabs you from the first few words it is a good one.
How can I find the rest of the story?
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