I like all of the descriptions you have in this poem, but it moved way too fast for me. It read like one big run on sentence in my opinion. This is one of those things where you need to slow down and capture the emotion a little better. Good start, thanks for the read!
Exactly what sort of problems are you having with the site? If you could specify, I would definitely be willing to help you. Don't get discouraged, though; I had no idea what to do when I first joined the site. Just keep at it, and I'm sure everything will be alright!
I think this is a nice little Valentine's story. You did a great job of writing this, I definitely could not make a story about eating chocolate last this long! Each chocolate was described in great detail, and I could almost taste it myself. Thanks for the special Valentine's story!
I think it is very nice that you wrote to all your fellow writers, as well give them advice. It's really great that you are giving back to the writing.com community. The tips you gave are ones I will keep note of throughout my writing career, and I'm sure many others will. Thanks for helping out by writing this column!
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