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Rated: E | (4.0)
I think that this is a really simple and passionate expression of how you feel. It reads like the lyric of a song. Do you write songs, and do you have any particular tunes in mind?

I like the cadence and the shape.

Now, honey, I look back,
and I think twice...
About the fairytale that should've been my life...

This verse doesn't read as smoothly as the rest. Maybe there are things you are trying to avoid expressing? The piece is about how you feel in the present. Maybe you are avoiding the fairytale of the past because you feel it's a lie?
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