I happen to believe by this that you are not a Christan. You say there is no proof of God, but the proof is everywhere ! In every person, thing, animal, and personality! I dont mean to preach to you, but i dont want to see you in hell. I hate to break it to you but that's where you will be if you don't believe in God.
I think the technical writing is good, that's what i rated you on, not the actual story line!
If you have any questions, or comments please email me back!! Happy writing!
~S~
I love the first couple lines, they were descriptive and warm and just beginning of sort of a feel good poem! The rest is very descriptive and imaginative and nice to read! It was very unique and nice to read!
~S~
I liked the chapter but seemed a little slow and boring. even as a slow story, a real one, i wish there was more suspense at the end. I also think you did a great job defining the charters!! Carmen defiantly has a personality and i cant wait to read more!! great work!!
I think we would all like to send a message back to ourselves and stop us from a mistake we were about to make or a message about something we didn't expect. I loved the writing!
~ Love Shyla`
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