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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: "we been through" should be "we've been through". A comma should replace the question mark following "relationship ends". "in stored" should be "in store". "your not" should be "you're not" instead, and "your all" be "you're all". "you're heart" should be "your heart". "Your the only" should be "You're the only". "your the first" should be "you're the first". "you're side" should be "your side". I hope this helps you out. 
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MY THOUGHTS: You did a marvelous job of relaying the fears felt while away, although distance cannot alter what is felt in the heart, which I felt was pointed out well in the line,
Sherri
Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize your work in any way. 
ERRORS: No grammatical or other mistakes were noticed. 
SUGGESTIONS: There are none I can think of for improving the item. 
MY THOUGHTS: I think the haiku is uplifting. In just three short lines, you managed to say a lot. I was impressed. Keep writing and enjoying life. It is precious indeed. 
ERRORS: No mistakes were spotted. 
CHARACTERS AND PLOT: N/A 
OVERALL OPINION: With some editing, I think the lyrics would be good. My favorite verse is the one where she asks why her love left. 
CHARACTERS & PLOT: The characters are defined perfectly, and the storyline superb. 
MY LIKES: The lead-up to the finale engrossed me. What he did to his subject was horrifying. After reading this, living in Vegas does not make this reader want to go there. 
Seriously though, I hope you intend to write more of this story. It's fantastic! 
MY DISLIKES: Absolutely none. I enjoyed the entire story. 
SUGGESTIONS: I cannot think of anything that would improve the entry. 
OVERALL OPINION: You did a marvelous job of using the prompt for this week. The rhythm is fantastic, and the meaning of love defined perfectly. Listening and sacrificing are essential to nourish a relationship, and that is not always easy. You did a super job of relaying these things. 
Sherri
SUGGESTIONS: None other than those mentioned above. 
OVERALL THOUGHTS: It may be a quick vent, but I agree that no one should put a label on anyone. We are all different, which you relay well in the poem. This does not make one crazy, simply different and unique in our own way. 
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: A comma should follow "Long ago", "standing to a window" should be "standing by", "the months of july" should be "month of July" (july capitalized), "watching beautifully..." simply worded something like "watching the beauty of nature and its monsoon". "i" should be capitalized also. "in practical" should be impractical". Numerous others like these noticed too. 
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PLOT: N/A 
I loved the lines about feeling her presence and the torch-like stars. This is a beautiful and very romantic poem. 
SUGGESTIONS: None, other than those mentioned above.
OVERALL OPINION: I agree that no one is in a good mood all of the time. Like mentioned, others can drag one down, however, I feel it is best steering away from them is usually best in order to avoid unnecessary drama and stress. However, there is always looking past these things and seeing the person for who they are most of the time. No one is perfect. Too many tend to forget that. I am glad you are one of those who try giving others the benefit of doubt. 
Thank you for your entry in 
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It is so hard understanding why one does these things because society makes him/her feel that being slender is more important than what lies within. I am a firm believer that outward appearances do not make up a person. It is who and what they are inside that counts. 
Sherri
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