"Slowly she came to believe more in that world then in ours." -- "then" should be "than"
"The woman who loved me tried to consoled me" -- "consoled" should be "console"
"Maybe god knew I could finally resist the darkness or maybe" -- "God" should be capitalized (You did properly capitalize "He" when referring to God. Good job.)
Very well put together. I loved the recurring line, "I was not sorry." Also, I've been there - I know what you're feeling.
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