wow how did you think me such a poem. the words flow so beautifully together. really very amazing :) my favourite lines were the last two if i had to choose out of all the other very beautiful ones.
wow what a read :)... I was pretty scared at the beginning since the way you described the illness made it seem very real. You are excellent at putting in little details which make it realistic and it definitely seems like you put a lot of thought into it. Just one slice of criticism... at first you said the woman was pregnant and then you said she was in her eighties O_o unless in the future women are more... fertile xD but excellent any way, I didn't spot any typos either ^___^
Can you believe it! It brought tears to my eyes... very beautiful plus it has a nice rhythm to it as well. I think I shall sing it to my baby sister tonight.
:3 The best poem I've read since I've joined :D
ok I understand that I haven't been here for quite long but something tells me I won't find many better than what I just read :)
Just one thing... you're last line could rhyme better xp apart from that- perfect.
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