I liked how you used thing like the word shell, and about the pizzas. But it was very short, his brothers were still in town (which isn't a problem), but they didn't fight anyone. Plus they were rescued in what seemed to be a very short amount of time. But I like the TMNT theme, and how you are doing the characters individually. It would just be nice to see some kind of invention by Donatello. Good idea, and keep writing.
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