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THE POEM
A lively look at the man himself, St. Patrick.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the opening stanza, "Shamrock worn, coloured green, Today's the day to wear it be seen." It drew me right in.
STRUCTURE
This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is an AABBCC etc rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. I liked how the each line started in the color green. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy to read. DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Asps, away from him they ran," -- I thought it was a very creative way to weave in the legend of St. Patrick driving out snakes from Ireland.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I loved how the poem ended, bringing it full circle and to the modern day with what we usually to do celebrate - dance, drink, and a pint of Guiness. A very imaginative poem that puts the reader in the moment! Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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THE POEM
The poem captures the essence of St. Patrick's Day shenanigans.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked how the poem framed St. Patrick's Day in a fun light. STRUCTURE
This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is no set rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. I liked how the author highlighted the beginning letter in green. That was a nice touch. DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Singing Irish poems Till the cows come home." That put a smile on my face. It was a nice way to set the mood and tone of the poem.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
A fun and enjoyable poem that captures the essence of a warmhearted St. Patrick's Day. My only suggestion, and this would be a matter of style, is to add some limited punctuation to give the poem more a rthymic flow. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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THE POEM
The poem is a heartfelt look at how the author's friend had touched their life.
WHAT I LIKED
The poem is poignant and heartfelt. It leaves the reader on an upbeat note, but it goes through emotional highs and lows as it dips and ebbs through life. In this way, it makes an emotional connection with the reader that resonates.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. The poem reads more like a prose as there are full sentences. The poem presents itself as a Christmas tree which is appealing as well as being done in green.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I suggest using WDC ML to increase the font so as to make it easier on the eyes for the WDC reader.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "To make it through the "tough times" with a strong heart and with wisdom." I think all of us strive for a strong heart when times are tough.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The poem is heartwarming and bittersweet to read. I have no suggestions for improvement. I thought the title was perfect for the presentation.
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THE POEM
The poem ponders the question "how is it that" I can't forget about you?
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the honest introspection the poem offers. Even when 2 years have passed, the author can remember her with such clarity it's unnerving. I had something similar happen to me and I would consider this man my "first" that I was in love with. Even now, there are times I think "how is it that...?"
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. The poem reads more like a prose as there are full sentences.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I suggest using WDC ML to increase the font so as to make it easier on the eyes for the WDC reader.
DESCRIPTIONS
There's no vivid descriptions - just everyday descriptions. One that sticks out to me is it's been two long years.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I thought the title matched the thoughts and sentiments of the poem well and evoked the reader to ponder the "what if" in their own lives. That's how the poem emotionally resonates with the reader. The poem is easy to read and understand.
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THE MESSAGE FORM
The forum invites WDC Community members to stop on by, introduce themselves, say hi and share fellowship and friendship.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the heartwarming tone the introduction set. I enjoyed the greeting: "Other beverages are available for those over 21, but tea is the best." I agree! Tea is the best!
INTRODCUTION
The introduction uses a graphic to help set the mood and tone of the forum along with a quote from Jimmy Buffet. If anything, there is a link to an invalid item in the introduction that I might suggest cleaning up.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML in the introduction to switch up the colors. It catches the reader's eyes more.
EMOTIONAL CONNECTION
The author connects with their visitors using a variety of techniques, such as heartwarming pictures and whimsical sayings. If anything the last entry was 17 years ago, so I'd love to see more recent interaction. I would be more than willing to stop back and rate the forum higher if there is more recent again and the invalid item is attended to.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The title is reflective of the forum and very inviting. See above for suggestions.
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THE ESSAY
A look at homeless. The author shares his thought on homeless, possible causes, choices, and how one choice can make a difference in your life.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the tone of the essay. It wasn't accusatory or "woe is me," but a thoughtful look at what causes homelessness and what can be done. Ultimately, it comes down to the choices one makes. Seeking the choice to pick oneself out of homelessness requires a lot of courage and then will power to follow through.
STRUCTURE
This is a paragraph formatted essay.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might suggest the use of WDC ML to make the font bigger so it would be easier to read for the reader.
EMOTIONAL CONNECTION
The author speaks in a tone that allows for an emotional connection with the reader. He sheds light on a problem that many might not understand to include the causes, drugs and gambling. The piece is poignant and very introspective.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
Genuine, heartfelt, and honest. The title is reflective of the content. I have no suggestions for improvement.
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THE CNOTES
Exercising Faith Cnotes are a heartwarming collection of cnotes that are faith inspired with quotes from the Bible.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the whimiscal graphic used for "A little Joy" which caught my attention most, but I also liked the heartwarming message for friendship, and I thought the graphic for "Hear my plea" struck a poignant chord.
ENGAGING
The cnotes offer a nice variety of messages, that while faith based, aren't too preachy to those who aren't of a Christian background. These are cnotes anyone of faith would feel comfortable using.
VARIETY
There are three cnotes in the collection. In that regard, I would like to see the collection expanded.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML in the introduction to "hook" the viewer and get them excited. They help to set the mood and tone of the collection.
PARTING THOUGHTS
Very creative and inspirational. I thought the Cnotes had a nice price point that WDC members could afford. I would recommend this collection for WDC Members.
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THE ESSAY
Written in 2020, a mother struggles with the restrictions that Covid-19 has set on the nation.
WHAT I LIKED
The essay tackles a very recent topical subject. It paints an accurate picture of what was going on at the time and the emotional whiplash parents had to deal with.
CONTENT
I am not familiar with the title. The essay is not long. It describes the problem and offers ideas to deal with the lockdown, but no solutions. The danger of kids leaning on the computer for interaction is a bit scary. The last part of the essay tugs on the heartstrings.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. I might also suggest increasing the font to make it easier for the reader's eyes on WDC.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I think a lot of parents can connect with the author's push/pull of acknowledging their children seek a cortisol boost by being on the computer doing other things than homework and wanting to offer them something other than the quick, addictive fix.
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THE BOOK
The book contains 7 entries and is fantasy themed.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the title. It caught my attention and made me curious about the book.
INTRODCUTION
The introduction is very plain and doesn't really set an idea in the reader's mind what to expect. I might suggest expanding the introduction by creating a 3-5 sentence blurb that teases what the plot is about. A more fleshed out blurb could also be used here. If so, I would use the first paragraph to explain the hero or heroine, the next paragraph to explain the conflict, and the last to set the rising action.
I would also using a graphic to set the tone or mood of the book.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. on the introduction or the chapter headings. If anything, I might suggest using a larger font in the entries as the current is hard to read on the eyes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The book has a lot of potential but none of the entries have been developed since 2014. The entries are short which encourages the reader to pop in, read, and move on.
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THE POEM
Does being an overachiever disadvantage others?
WHAT I LIKED
The poem tackles a very topical subject for the modern day and challenges the reader to look at the differences between the overachiever and the jobless. Is there a middle ground? Could the unemployed storyteller have been more tactful in getting his point across? Would that have kept him the job? Questions to ponder.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. There is a (") after matches your character which seems oddly placed.
DESCRIPTIONS
The descriptions are very "to the point," for example -- "he stares at me." In that regard, the descriptions do a good job of matching the harsh tone of the poem.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The poem is easy to read. The mood of the poem is somber. No likes losing a job.
The poem reflects the reality of life. Even friends, who gifted with an advantage, find it a struggle to think of others when money is involved. "Money makes people funny" is an expression that rings true time and time again. Another thing I thought of - when two sides are polar opposite, how can there be reconciliation?
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THE POEM
A day at the beach framed between the waves that crash on the seashore.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved how the poem progressed to tell a story. Well done!
STRUCTURE
This is free form poem. There were no set rythming patterns.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/ punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Dark clouds gather ominously above the scavenging seagulls"
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions for improvement. The poem progressed line by line as it told it's story. I could picture everything. I loved how the repetition of the last line, "crash upon the seashore" ties the poem together. Very good storytelling!
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THE POEM
July is a steady month - known for summer and vacations, but as memories fade, just how steady was it?
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the visuals the poem evoked. Simple, yet succinct word play puts the reader in the moment. STRUCTURE
This is free form poem. There was no set rythme patterns.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the poem easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "as the skies cast shadows over July."
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions for improvement. With few words the author conveys vivid visuals and evokes emotions well. Everyone thinks of July as summer. It's time to enjoy the nice weather, play, go on vacations, and yet, every so often, carefree summer can be haunted by shadows. While the poem hints at weather changes and life obligations, I think uncertainty can be whatever is challenging you in your own life. It's this juxapostion, well done, that dares the reader to go deeper.
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THE POEM
The poem tells a story through weather and storms that mirror the highs and lows of our own life. WHAT I LIKED
I loved the word play; it deepened the expression of the poem. I felt like I went a journey and discovered my own weathered traveled life.
STRUCTURE
This is free form poem. There was no set rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Rainbows ribboned across sunlit skies" Great visual with succinct wording.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions for improvement. The title fits the poem well. A great read that challenges the reader to take time and reflect, leaving one on a positive note.
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THE POEM
A poem about light, the power of it's reflection, and that special something that hovers just above the light.
WHAT I LIKED
I enjoyed the word play; it deepened the expression of the poem and made me think of different angles of interpretation.
STRUCTURE
This is a cinquain poem. This a 5 line stanza poem. The lines are 2, 4. 6, 8 and 2 syllables.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling mistakes. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "light is dancing" -- light is electric, vibrant, and alive. Light gives life.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
I loved the flow of the poem and the invitation to give light your own interpretation. Was it a lover basking in the light of lovemaking or simply the early morning twilight breaking out the positivity in one's soul? I enjoyed this poem very much!
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THE POEM
This poem deal with nature, specifically spring.
WHAT I LIKED
I enjoyed the visual and how it put me in the moment.
STRUCTURE
This is a haiku. A haiku is a short form of Japanese poetry, traditionally with 3 lines, and a 5,7,5 syllable pattern. The poem here matches traditional form.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling mistakes. The poem is easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "A cardinal pair" - It was descriptive enough to picture two red birds on an early spring tree branch with green buds just popping out.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The haiku also had a challenge - not to use the letter "E." Very good job writing a visual without that letter! The haiku did a great job capturing the following elements; simplicity, directness of expression and intensity. Well done!
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THE POEM
The poem is a relaxing camping experience during the summer at a lake.
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the progression of the story in the poem. A succinct use of words had me right there relaxing and enjoying all the day had to offer. A wonderful experience of the five senses.
STRUCTURE
This is free form poem. There were some stragetic rhymes, but no set patterns.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. It makes the poem easy to read.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Gliding across glass" when describing canoeing across the lake, but honestly, the poem is full of rich description.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The poem opens with an invitation for you to close your eyes and imagine. It comes full circle when it does the same at the end. Brilliant. The first invitation plants the hint of being transported to another time and place. The 2nd invitation leaves you longing to visit Northwoods. An enjoyable, heartwarming poem!
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID! Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL! Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem. This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified. Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Cupid shoots the arrows, spreading the love.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: GOOD. Cupid is told to go away until next year.
Cupid is doing what cupid does.
STRUCTURE
This is a rythming poem with the 2nd and 4th lines rythming. The 1st and 3rd lines do not rythme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
There's not much of a slam. The poem has a nice flow to it. Worthy of a 4.5 Star.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID! Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL! Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem. This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified. Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
THE POEM
Cupid is a sweetie as he goes about looking for lovers.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: GOOD. Cupid is a jolly fellow with fluffy wings. He smiles and giggles and is a sweet cutie with rosy cheeks.
It's a pretty sweet, kindhearted description.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
No slam, here, just love little baby Eros. Worthy of a 4 star.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID! Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL! Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem. This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified. Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Blindfolded Cupid hit his target in an open field.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: GOOD. Well, Cupid is blindfolded.
Cupid's arrow is like a heart tipped missile.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem with no rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
With an ode to Shakespeare, and a couple of thees and thines, the poem tells a story of a wayward arrow with a bad result. Bad poetry, but the slam is a little tame with a heart tipped missile.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID! Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL! Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem. This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified. Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Cupid is kinda smelly when he goes into action.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: BAD. His best is like a fart that smells worse than the rest. It's descriptive but it's only 1 slam and doesn't quite raise to the level of Ugly.
STRUCTURE
This is a rythming poem that has an ABAB rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
While intentionally bad, the cupid slam comes off a bit tame. Worthy of a 1.5 star.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID! Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL! Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem. This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified. Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Cupid gets drunk with shooting off his arrows.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: BAD. Cupid put on women's clothing as he got dressed.
It's a slam, but could be more creative.
STRUCTURE
This is a rythming poem with an ABCBC rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
While intentionally bad, the cupid slam comes off a bit tame. Worthy of a 1.5 star.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID! Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL! Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem. This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified. Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Cupid has a history of poor matchmaking hijinks.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: UGLY ENOUGH. Cupid has flimsy wings, tattered and fragil. A love guru he's not.
The poet gives plenty of reasons for Cupid to retire.
STRUCTURE
This is a rythming poem with an AABB rythme scheme. Each stanza has 4 lines.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The slams are ugly enough to be ugly, but I've seen uglier. Worthy of a 1 star review.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:
Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID! Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL! Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem. This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified. Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!
A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.
And now... onto the review....
THE POEM
Cupid is back to do his yearly duty.
WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:
SLAM: UGLY. He's a little creep with pudgy cheeks and wears wrinkled Huggies with tattered lace.
Great descriptions! Easy to visualize.
STRUCTURE
The first 3 lines of the stanza rythme with the 4th line rythming with every 4th line. Subtle, yet catchy.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
Well done ugly. Cupid's slams are visual and "ewww" worthy.
Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules. A well earned 1 star!
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