This is a cute piece..Being owned by a dog I initially expected this to be the thoughts of a non-dog person. I was pleasantly surprised to learn that this was your dog "...who did nothing wrong." I have one suggestion regarding continuity: Omit "I hadn't looked down yet, but then" and begin your third sentence with "The stench hit my nose..." You do look down in your sixth sentence to"...see a greenish-brown clump".
I do agree that there is little worse than fresh, steaming dog poo oozing "...through the gaps of my toes."
I am assuming that this was written as a children's story and as such it is quite successful. The photo is intriguing and explained in the tale. The telling is direct and concise, but does not resort to "non-adult" language, using vocabulary that might challenge a youngster to visit a Dictionary. Nicely done.
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