I really enjoyed this short story about the redemption of a fallen angel. The dialogue was good and clear throughout, though the terms you kept coming up with made me wish you had delved deeper into explanation of them, as I don't really read paranormal romance, though this was certainly an intriguing piece.
I guess my only criticism is that it would have been nice to break up the dialogue with more exposition so that we readers can have a better idea of what the different terms mean in the context of the story. I think it would make for a longer, more fully robust tale and it would be all the more better for it.
Thanks for sharing this piece with the rest of the community and may you continue producing works such as this.
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