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Rated: E | (3.5)
Good descriptions of heat. But it's pretty predictable I hope that as you continue there is more going on, especially informing us more about the protag's powers and such. You should def continue the story

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Rated: E | (4.0)
It's a very strong poem and it has a really nice rhythm, throughout. the only hick-up that I experienced was at the end. The question marks and strange wording kind of train-wrecked what before was a song. Maybe that's what you wanted, but it's at least something to consider.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
It think its a very good piece. The conclusion is definitely good. The only suggestions that I would propose is that you concentrate more on the rhythm of the lines and the adjectives you use. Like, you use a lot of triplets of adj. and I think those could be used more often to give the pacing more rhythm. Of course, it is not poetry on purpose, but I think that might make more poetic prose.

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