I hate to say I "enjoyed" your story, if you know what I mean. Great writing and very sad. It really made me think of our country's children and what is happening to them.
Your characters were very vivid. Really Good Job!
Interesting story and very well written. It kind of threw me because at the beginning the storyline was sad. But, it changed into to something weird which is not a bad thing because I like the scarry, horror genre too. Great Job. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Good story. I think I would like to know a little more about the character Josh and why he is seeing ghosts. Also, in the second parargraph, the sentence " After about a week they were all unpacked and set," I would make that one sentence and start a new sentence with "Josh woke up one morning and went downstairs," but the story was really interesting.
I would like to know more about these two people and what happened to Josh and "his ghost".
I've been told to check my typos. I'm going to pass this valuable info to you. Also, be sure to proof read, it always helps. In all a really good story.
dmsmith
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