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Review of Memories  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What fun!p
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your piece strikes a chord with the heart. The universality of the human condition regarding aging is immediately felt.
On the technical side you might consider dropping some connecting words. Example; "In each loving caress, tenderness shown." To my ear the words flow easier without using "there's". Just my humble opinion about what is a beautiful sentiment. Nice work.
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