I happened upon your poetry and I'm glad that I did. I love the way you carefully considered the exact words to describe while rhyming. Also, the symbolism in here at the end is quite good. I was surprised that I could actually like a poem about business travel! Thanks for the read and keep up the good work.
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Overall impression: This was a good story. I feel that it felt rushed somehow and would liked to have seen a longer version. I think you have the makings of a great story though if it were a bit longer.
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Overall impression: I loved the poem! It was so utterly sad but with possible happiness just waiting right on the fringes. It shows how fragile marriage really is; with ups and downs that ultimately have us all on a trapeze. I could feel the emotion coming from the poem and visualize everything that was transpiring. Thanks so much for sharing and keep writing!!!!
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Overall impression: What you have to say in the piece is very admirable. The only thing that takes away from it are the multiple grammatical errors and fragmented sentences. If you edit it, I'm sure it will stand out more. Keep writing!
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Overall impression: I thought this poem was well written and powerful. My favorite line was "The inside or the outside ghost." It also reads very well when read outloud. Good work...keep writing!
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I could visualize everything happening in the piece of poetry. Extremely, good writing...I absolutely loved it! I really liked "the gasoline perfumed dust"...that was wonderful.. Good work and keep writing!
Welcome to WdC! Please bear in mind that the opinions expressed by me are strictly from my viewpoint. Ultimately, only you can decide what is right for your piece. This was an interesting take from the viewpoint of a Zombie! I don't normally read such items, but I really enjoyed your writing and the tounge in cheek humor. Great job! Keep up the good work and keep writing!
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I absolutely adored this piece of work. The descriptive were amazing and I was hooked from the very first paragraph. It actually made me laugh out loud in a few places...nice satire.
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Overall impression: A very eerie story! It puts me in the mind of an R.L. Stine novel or Fear Street. Wonderfully constructed and I loved the ending. "Today I found one of those black marks on my chest" That was an excellent way to end the story. Good job and keep writing.
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Overall impression: This has the makings of a very good essay! I enjoyed reading about you and your goals. I also liked the fact that you used quotes to back up what you said about yourself in your essay. However, there are several grammactical and spelling errors so you should look closely at this and edit it again. Also, it may sound better if a transitory word was used to begin each paragraph. Other than that..great job! Keep writing!
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Overall impression: I felt the intense heartache from the author and this poem is very well written. It speaks of a man who's life has been reduced to crying uncontrollably and feeling helpless in his situation. Many people will be able to relate to this piece. A great piece of work. Keep writing!
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This was an excellent haiku! I loved the simplicity of it and I could picture the warm sun rising to greet the day. Great work and keep writing!
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I really liked your piece entitled 'Hidden Secrets'. I think everyone can relate to playing the part of the 'happy' person while inside we are an emotional mess at times. Your poem was very powerful and I loved the 'rusty lock' analogy. Great writing and keep up the good work!
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Overall impression: I definitely got the sense that you found writing.com at a very integral part of your life; as did I. The writing flows well and you did a wonderful job at conveying your appreciation. The only suggestion I have is that you may want to edit for a minor mistake you made in writing 'me' instead of 'my'. Keep up the good work and keep writing!
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Overall impression: This piece definitely made me laugh. I've read War and Peace a couple of times waiting on ...SOME PEOPLE who shall remain nameless...to either finish in the bathroom or to get ready to go somewhere. I don't think I've ever reallly had a hot shower? Very well written and many people can sympathize with the character. Keep up the good work and keep writing!
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Overall Impression: Great piece of work. I definitely felt the pride from understanding and accepting who you are. I, too, understand what it feels like to be different as I am transgendered and have been through my transition from female to male. This piece spoke to me and I'm glad you are accepting of who you are and not letting anyone change that. The poetry spoke to me and I thank you for posting it. Keep writing and great job!
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Overall impression: As much...and I mean MUCH...as I hate mathematics I truly loved this limerick! Of course, my mind is spinning like crazy and I have immense anxiety but from the math, but other than I thoroughly enjoyed it! (I just hope I can eventually figure it out mathematically.....I'm challenged in that respect...ha ha) Keep up the good work....great writing.
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Overall Impression: I loved this piece! The descriptives were right on spot and I could actually see the story of this man unfolding. I could also feel his pain. Well done. There were a few typos you may want to look at, for example, you wrote 'the' instead of he in the third line. Other than that...great job.
That was an extremely powerful and poignant poem! I also have someone with bipolar disorder in my family so I can definitely relate. Your descriptive words and the analogy was fantastic. Keep up the good work and I hope to see more from you in the near future!
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