Not at all bad. I see this is chapter 2 of a story. You've done well with it. You don't need to have read chapter 1. It seems to stand on it's own well enough. I caught only one spelling error which, of course, is good. You kept my interest throughout. Keep it up. Flesh out the story. It looks good so far.
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