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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I found this to be an interesting story. It is a nice foundation for a teen book. The only thing that was a bit confusing was the use of the name Rachael and the short version of Ray. This first time you used the name Ray, I assumed the character was male, as in Raymond. Then, as the story moved forward and you used Rachael, I thought this was a different character. I had to go back and re-read the first part to be sure of your intention.

Other than that, I felt this was a nice start to teen book. I'd continue to flesh it out and see where it leads you. Nice job!
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