Other than some technical errors like (using ammonia to wake someone when it is supposed to be anesthetic and extremly pungent, naming a robot after a nordic god) the story was very interesting.
The central tension caused by lack of trust between the creator and creation has been well esthablished and makes it a good read.
I suggest some name changes of the characters for futurustic and ficitional effect . I also urge the writer to be more imginative with future technology but the indestructible bug was terrific.
thank you
sam
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