You really have a way with words. Not only is your language strong but your love seems quite powerful. The description is spot on. I love the way you describe the "us" in everything and not just "him" or "me" only. Now that is a perfect relationship. All the best in your writing and your wonderful life. PS your work made me bite back tears and you're really lucky, girl!
You're describing a simple incident at a park. The grandparents are unhappy because of the geographical distance between them and the kids. The reader will feel and initial sympathy at it, because the narrator rarely sees his grankids. But the other man's situation is far sorrowful, because the gap between him and his grandchildren is something that can never ever be bridged. The story is wonderfully presented. Great style.
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