This story is strange but interesting. I have to say I was intrigued at the story line. It was different and I like different because you don't always want to read the same old story lines.. I liked the characters and how you used alice and wonderland. It's one if my favorite movies. I'm going to have to read part 2 good job!!
I can deffinately relate to your story. I was 17 once and a similar thing happened to me. I liked your story because it something teens face on a daily basis. Good job
Hello my names samisoke. I wanted to thank you for writing this good price of work I really liked this Piece of work. Did he end up hurting himself?? I think he did if what I read was correct. What a way to put a twist in the writing. I could picture the story/poem in my head. I love when people write like this because it helps the reader visualize what's going on. keep up the good work. There wasn't anything that I disliked about your story. Good job
Wow very weird story. The flow of the story was very good.I didn't see any spelling error but we always miss something now and again because we are only human. I liked how you used an idea that a lot of people deal with. It helps people relate to the story. Good job and keep up the good work
Good story I loved your descriptiveness. I liked how you made it like a 3 person story hear 3 different sides of the story. That's something I haven't seen year and I have to say you pulled it off very well. I deffinately didn't think that the story was goin to end like that. That's just crazy. A human brain but detached from the skull still functioning Good job.
I loved it!! The chemistry between curio n Moses is breath taking. It's written very eell n the descriptions you used were fantastic. The were a few spelling errors but besides that I thought it was wonderful. After reading blizzard of 93 it was nice to get to no a lil history about these characters. I couldn't stop reading once I started. I like how there both really like loners but karma or fate brought thntogeher. I no myself and I'm one who believes in love at first sight and you could just tell reguardless of age difference that they had that connection. This is the type of story j can see in my head as I'm reading and I love that in books. It's like watching a movie!! Job well done!! If you ever need some one to edit your work for spelling or grammatical stuff I would love the chance! Keep up the good work definitely going to read more. I can't stop now hahaha
I loved your poem I could feel the intesity in your words. It has a great flow to it. Once i started to read it I could't stop til I got to the end. Your descrption and word were used wonderfully. Great Poem and I'm definately going to come back and check out more of your work. Keep up the good job..
Wow that was really good i had terars coming to my eyes. I lost my father when i was only 15 so I no exactly where your coming from with this poem. You hit the nail right on the head. Its like you have read the mind of anyone who has lost a loved one. Excellent peice of work
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